Will you remember to put in how amazingly awesome I am and how I save the day?
But seriously, the story looks great, there is a great amount of detail and monologue sort of thing going without it being boring (quite the opposite) and I was unhappy when I reached the end. It's good, Arvy. And do whatever you need with the people in order to make it better.
TaylorFlame - The Definitive Man.